Hollywood Cash is a new employee trying to please 2 bosses The Dan Danger and the sexy Linda Lan. She is an assistant to both and for the most part, they keep things professional but when Linda realizes that Dan is being sleazy and paying way too much attention to Hollywood’s ASS-ets and not her work ethic she shows the busty blonde that she is the better, sexier boss.
Use more prose when you describe the settings. Bhabhi sex It helps.Report 2008-09-23 16:15:32good start. you have room to grow in the next couple of chapters, and i look forward to reading them.«123» Use more prose when you describe the settings. 2. 2. 11 s«123»Report 2009-01-15 17:44:15Is his name jack or jeffREADERReport 2008-12-30 21:02:39Yes,you’ve gotten some pointers.NOW,write some more.eiggahReport 2008-11-30 15:13:31sweet story mmmwordytomReport 2008-10-25 21:03:17Two things:
1. 2. 11 s«123»Report 2009-01-15 17:44:15Is his name jack or jeffREADERReport 2008-12-30 21:02:39Yes,you’ve gotten some pointers.NOW,write some more.eiggahReport 2008-11-30 15:13:31sweet story mmmwordytomReport 2008-10-25 21:03:17Two things:
1. 2. If you brought the feelings of the characters into the story more it would help. 2. 11 s«123»Report 2009-01-15 17:44:15Is his name jack or jeffREADERReport 2008-12-30 21:02:39Yes,you’ve gotten some pointers.NOW,write some more.eiggahReport 2008-11-30 15:13:31sweet story mmmwordytomReport 2008-10-25 21:03:17Two things:
1. If you brought the feelings of the characters into the story more it would help.
