learn about dialog and paragraphs. Bhabhi sex the plot holes are big enough to drive a semi through.Report 2009-03-09 15:19:16That was a pretty good story, but poorly formatted. 49 s«12345»anonymous readerReport 2013-01-24 15:32:59needs a major rewrite the paragraphs started good but got way to long at the end. 6/10Report 2008-10-27 04:18:57real good but the BEERREADERReport 2008-01-05 19:48:25fuck the beer the story kicked ass KEEP the stories comingREADERReport 2007-11-27 22:44:46dude awesome story but what about the beer you need the beer«12345» 6/10Report 2008-10-27 04:18:57real good but the BEERREADERReport 2008-01-05 19:48:25fuck the beer the story kicked ass KEEP the stories comingREADERReport 2007-11-27 22:44:46dude awesome story but what about the beer you need the beer«12345» way to much boring stuff and way to rushed what happened here in one day should be spread out over months. way to much boring stuff and way to rushed what happened here in one day should be spread out over months.




















