The idea of the story is good, and I applaud anyone willing to complete a story that has stopped before it was finished, but in my opinion it needs a lot of work to live up to its potential. There obviously needed to be a change in Narcissa and Belatrix but their basic natures have been lost, which makes the whole point of the story rather redundant. Mom xxx That is before we move on to the writing, it is almost devoid of adjectives, and the descriptive writing (such as it is) is very pedestrian. I know that all that sAnonymous readerReport 2008-06-17 10:17:52i can say alot of things, but i dont need to this story speakes for itselfhappy readerReport 2008-06-17 00:56:30all i can say is amen to u man. That is before we move on to the writing, it is almost devoid of adjectives, and the descriptive writing (such as it is) is very pedestrian.
