work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. xxx video hd the story sounded like someone very very young wrote it. work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. 14 comments«123»READERReport 2008-02-14 23:00:29its an ok story you really need to work on how it was written. the story sounded like someone very very young wrote it. work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. you got the two mixed up.READERReport 2007-08-17 17:09:27You left it open so you have a chance to improve, proofread, spellcheck, extend your plot, give it some more time and you should be fine. the story sounded like
