3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2011-01-17 07:00:15Started well, but a bit rushed at the end. video xxx this is my first story and I would like to know what you thought about it, also leave some comments of what i should add in part 2, and tell me what you didnt like about the story, I made a typo so sorry about that btw!«1» this is my first story and I would like to know what you thought about it, also leave some comments of what i should add in part 2, and tell me what you didnt like about the story, I made a typo so sorry about that btw!«1» this is my first story and I would like to know what you thought about it, also leave some comments of what i should add in part 2, and tell me what you didnt like about the story, I made a typo so sorry about that btw!«1»
