Using the phrase “my brother so often” detracted from an other wise great story. Loved the storyREADERReport 2005-06-09 08:32:07Not bad. Desi xxx A bit of dialogue issues, and some proofreading stuff, but other than that, great. Also, why were two paragraphs repeated in the story.«12345» 21 comments«12345»READERReport 2005-12-13 17:10:22Not a bad story but hearing her refer to him as “my brother ” got old quick. Other than that, it was a greeat story.READERReport 2005-09-24 14:37:15good story. Other than that, it was a greeat story.READERReport 2005-09-24 14:37:15good story. 9/10READERReport 2005-06-27 12:07:25My three older brothers did me like that forl years. Using the phrase “my brother so often” detracted from an other wise great story. I thought it was a good story. 9/10READERReport 2005-06-27 12:07:25My three older brothers did me like that forl years. Also, why were two paragraphs repeated in the story.«12345» Loved the storyREADERReport 2005-06-09 08:32:07Not bad. One still comes to visit for a repeat whem my husband of ten years is on the road.
